FUNNEL LEAD INTRODUCTION

Class hours are a problem for parents and children, seen from different points of view, each one thinks differently when talking about this important topic. For each one sees his good things and his bad things from his part and his benefits.

THE POLLUTION ESSAY

The air pollution make our h¡world worst, so there are different ways to provide them, and make our world better to live
First of all, we need to create awareness, where we need to stop burning stover, make or create campaings for convicing people, made more advertisement to make people scared, and at schools create programs for students mentality.
Secondly, we can develop urban foresty, inversing in experts, making replanting and creating new green spaces that making new nature areas.
Finally, we should create new laws. For example, tickets for idealing, and push for goverment policy to regulate the industry,
In conclusion, as we can see there are so many different ways to stop the air pollution.

WRITTING JOURNAL

21/10/19 11:15- 11:27
The right age to get married
There are not a right age to get married because you do It when you want. But some people think that if they get married after thid age they "se les pasará el arroz". Also nowadays lots of families get married when they have children and they are very old, or maybe they duda not get married.

23/10/19 13:36-13:44
A good friend
Lourdes is a good friend of mine, we have known each other for about 2 months and It is like we know each other for lots of years. I met her in the university residence, she is like my sister, we told allí yo the other.

25/10/19 10:05-10:13
Shopping
I hate go shopping, for me It is boring, because i do not like go to each shop, i prefer go shopping when i need an específico thing , because i only go for thid, and i do not spend so much time. But sometimes i want going with my friends, that is something that i really love.

26/10/19 14:07-14:18
Your last day in your country
If this is correct, i would like to enjoy the last day with my friends and my family doing the things that i most like, because is the best way to remenber it better, without negative things. Then, when you are in a foreign country you remember your country like a good place to recommend to another people to go there and enjoy it.

28/10/19  21:30-21:42
Your first day in the united states
Go to the place where I’m going to stay, unpack and once this is finished, go around the city, so I can get to know her better and meet people to go out with in my free time and enjoy my stay there with good memories. Then enjoying my new home and the paradise you can appreciate because i will never forget it.

30/10/19 9:02-9:13
Discrimination
Discrimination means treating a person unfairly because of who they are or because they possess certain characteristics. If you have been treated differently from other people only because of who you are or because you possess certain characteristics, you may have been discriminated against. There are some differents types of discrimination the most common is acoso.

2/11/19 10:45-10:53
Your favourite food
My favourite food is pasta, i love it so much, i enjoy it every time. When i go to Italy i always eat pasta apart of that is the specialish food there is because is my favourite food. I can not live with out it. But it has a problem that is having lots if calories, so I usually eat pasta, only one day each two weeks. Now i am living in a residence and here, almost every day they make pasta for the lunch or the dinner.

3/11/19 19:07- 19:18
The best car to own
I don’t have any in mind, I would like anyone, since I’m not a very capricious girl and I’ll settle for anything the truth, I wouldn’t jinx anything. or that it is bigger or smaller since right now I am alone and I would not share it with anyone else, later if I have children or something my opinion would change the safer.

4/11/19 10:10- 10:17
Smoking in public spaces
Smoking in public spaces, for many people who don’t smoke annoyingly, because the smoke gets into their clothes and then smells pretty bad, people who smoke usually don’t care, but they should think about the others and not bother them. for example, in football is allowed to smoke, but those of us who do not smoke and we touch side by side one that if it is really annoying to spend the whole game smoking your your cigarette.

6/11/19 12:23-12-31
A movie star or singer you like
The singer that i like most is beret because I love all their songs, and the lyrics are beautiful, I love to wear them when I am sad even if they are too sad because they encourage me. I love going to their concerts even though they are very expensive, because I really enjoy them singing with the other people. 

8/11/19 10:23-10:34 a believe you have or you used to have
one of my dreams is to follow in the footsteps of my uncle who is a teacher of English, reason why I am doing English studies, I have always liked languages, I have had a strong passion for them and for being a teacher, So I’d like to get my master’s degree to be an English teacher like my uncle 

14/11/19 14:16- 14:25
A story from your childhood
Once I remember being with my family at my grandmother’s house and I felt like jumping on my grandmother’s bed then I was very happy to jump, and my aunt was next door but she didn’t notice and I fell to the ground, Then I couldn’t move my arm and they took me to the hospital. So i do not have anything in my arm.

20/11/19 12:33-12:40
A favourite possesion
my mobile is my favorite since I have everything there, I like to use it for everything like my computer, I would not exchange them for anything in the world, and besides my mobile is new so better than better, I would give something if I stole it. The first mobile I had was for my communion for which you could only call

22/11/19 11:03-11:14
Music that is special to you
The only music that’s special to me is the slow one, and the old pop I love what I enjoy very much my friends call me weird for those tastes but I don’t care, because as that there is nothing. Amaral I always love in the car I go listening to his music and relaxes me. I think every music is assigned to a specific moment of life.

28/11/19 13:43-13:50
A special gift  you have give or received
I remember that once a teacher of mine gave me a book made by her, that teacher is magnificent gave me in 1 and 2 of primary today is one of my friends, we share a strong passion together, football and gave me that gift for having finished 2 of bach, it is nonsense for many people but for me is magnificent no words. i will always thanks her.

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CONCLUSION

DESCRIPTIVE LEAD SPEEC

INTRODUCTION OPENING SENTENCES

WRITTING THESIS STATEMENTS

MY 1ST OUTLINE

COHESION AND COHERENCE EDITION VERSION OF A PARAGRAPH

PROBLEM SOLUTION PARAGRAPH

Bullying
1.Childrens nowadays have lots of problems at school, one of these is bullying. Parents tend to stop it, because it can cause lots of problems on theis life. parents can talk to their teachers about what other people do, then the director talk to this person. Because it can change their marks or they can not concentrate very well at school because other people disturb them.

2. Nowadays at school the bullying is taken part and some students need to life with it. Families have an important role in these cases, so they need to talk with the teache and the director. Finally, they need to talk to the bullier´s parents about the problem. Parents and the school need to stop this enormous problem

BLOCK ORGANISATION

"Employees should be permited to work at home"

"Is the exploration of space worthwile?"

PEER EDITING OPINION PARAGRAPH

MY OPINION ABOUT SCHOOLS AND CREATIVITY

COMPARISONS

7D

5B

2A

COMPARISONS POEM

SHALL I COMPARES YOU TO..,?

Shall I compares you to the weather?

for that I have to give you first a reason.

You have a pride greater than the sun,

and that make my fun.
The colour of your eyes,
are like the cold outsides.
And you are taller than me,
because it is 0 degrees.

DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPH: " HOW TO STOP PROCCASTINATING

If you don´t want to make proccastinating you some different ways to do it. First of all, you need to make a list, where you put the things that you need but in order from the least time to the longest, but before you need to consider the big picture. Then, if you you want to stop it you can: do checkmarks when you finish the task, you can deadlines the priorities and finally start with them. That sometimes could be so difficult but you need  to try it carefuly.

OPINION PARAGRAPH: "INTERNET FOR REFUGEES"

Internet for refuges is not a principal priority for them, there are more priorities that they should have. Some people tend to think that the internet is a principal necessity for refuges because they can be connected with their family or they can stay more informed about what is happening around the world. But what´s about having food or water, these are not a necessity? Is more important for a refuge have the internet? Because I do not think that this is the right option.   

ANALYSIS OF A TED TALK

Sr. Ken robinson  

1. What´s the topic of the TED talk? What´s the main idea? When does the speaker introduce his idea? How? The topic is education. The main idea is the education system. He introduces the idea at the very beginning.  He compares two similar ideas. 
2. What are the means of support used by the speaker to convince us that his opinion is right? Provide examples. With examples, jokes, personal experiences, histories, definitions, facts. For example, that all Childrens are artists, the education system. 
3. What´s the speaker´s conclusion how does he “conclude”? He restates his opinion at the very beginning. 

FINAL VERSION

Young people drugs and alcohol addiction is nowadays one of the main topics in a conversation. Because it has really dangerous consequences in young people, but they don´t mind that enormous problems, because  for example they do binge drinking here in Spain. So we need to do something to stop that, because is not normal that enormous problem in the society. 

DRAFTING MY FIRST PARAGRAPH

1.Topic	Young people drugs and alcohol addiction is nowadays one of the main topics in a conversation.
2.Reason	Drugs and alcohol have really dangerous consequences in young people, but they don´t mind that enormous problem.
3.Example	e.g. binge drinking in Spain.
4.Argument	The problems that have drugs and alcohol addiction in young people.
5.Conclusion	We need to do something to stop that because is not normal that enormous problem in the society.

ORGANISING PARAGRAPH

3.1 A.  

topic	Despite this, many countries encourage the growth of homeownership.
example	Ireland and Spain, for example, allow mortgage payers tooffset payments against income tax.
reason	It is widely believed that owning your own home has social as well as economic benefits.
Supporting point1	Compared to renters, homeowners are thought to be morestable members of the community who contribute more tolocal affairs.
Supporting point 2	In addition, neighbourhoods of owner occupiers areconsidered to have less crime and better schools.
Supporting point 3	But above all, ownership encourages saving and allowsfamilies to build wealth.

B 

c. In addition, neighbourhoods of owner occupiers are considered to have less crime and better schools. 

4.1 a  

Topic sentence	All these claims were challenged by the economic crash of 2008, which was in large part caused by defaults on American sub-prime mortgages
Definition	These had been developed to allow higher-risk poorer families to buy their own homes, but contributed to a property price bubble.
Result 1	Even households that had positive equity still felt poorer and reduced their spending.
Result 2	Others were trapped in their houses by negative equity, in other words their houses were worth less than they had paid for them.
Result 3	When this burst, millions of people lost their homes, which for many had contained their savings.
Conclusion	Many economists now argue that there is a maximum level of home ownership that should not be exceeded.

b, c.  

 6 a. 

Topic	It is claimed that increases in rate of home ownership lead to unemployment
Reason	Home ownership appears to make people more reluctant to move to find work
Example	e.g. Spain (high ownership + high unemployment) vs. Switzerland (low ownership + low unemployment).
Argument	Theory still controversial.
Conclusion	Other factors have been proposed, e.g. liquidity of housing markets (how easy to sell houses).

2.1 

1.More connectors

2.No colloquial expressions

3.Question in tittle not adrresed

4.Sentences are too short

5.No reference are given

6.Too much space  given to basic points