PROBLEM SOLUTION PARAGRAPH

Bullying
1.Childrens nowadays have lots of problems at school, one of these is bullying. Parents tend to stop it, because it can cause lots of problems on theis life. parents can talk to their teachers about what other people do, then the director talk to this person. Because it can change their marks or they can not concentrate very well at school because other people disturb them.

2. Nowadays at school the bullying is taken part and some students need to life with it. Families have an important role in these cases, so they need to talk with the teache and the director. Finally, they need to talk to the bullier´s parents about the problem. Parents and the school need to stop this enormous problem

BLOCK ORGANISATION

"Employees should be permited to work at home"

"Is the exploration of space worthwile?"

PEER EDITING OPINION PARAGRAPH

MY OPINION ABOUT SCHOOLS AND CREATIVITY

COMPARISONS

7D

5B

2A

COMPARISONS POEM

SHALL I COMPARES YOU TO..,?

Shall I compares you to the weather?

for that I have to give you first a reason.

You have a pride greater than the sun,

and that make my fun.
The colour of your eyes,
are like the cold outsides.
And you are taller than me,
because it is 0 degrees.

DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPH: " HOW TO STOP PROCCASTINATING

If you don´t want to make proccastinating you some different ways to do it. First of all, you need to make a list, where you put the things that you need but in order from the least time to the longest, but before you need to consider the big picture. Then, if you you want to stop it you can: do checkmarks when you finish the task, you can deadlines the priorities and finally start with them. That sometimes could be so difficult but you need  to try it carefuly.

OPINION PARAGRAPH: "INTERNET FOR REFUGEES"

Internet for refuges is not a principal priority for them, there are more priorities that they should have. Some people tend to think that the internet is a principal necessity for refuges because they can be connected with their family or they can stay more informed about what is happening around the world. But what´s about having food or water, these are not a necessity? Is more important for a refuge have the internet? Because I do not think that this is the right option.   

ANALYSIS OF A TED TALK

Sr. Ken robinson  

1. What´s the topic of the TED talk? What´s the main idea? When does the speaker introduce his idea? How? The topic is education. The main idea is the education system. He introduces the idea at the very beginning.  He compares two similar ideas. 
2. What are the means of support used by the speaker to convince us that his opinion is right? Provide examples. With examples, jokes, personal experiences, histories, definitions, facts. For example, that all Childrens are artists, the education system. 
3. What´s the speaker´s conclusion how does he “conclude”? He restates his opinion at the very beginning. 

FINAL VERSION

Young people drugs and alcohol addiction is nowadays one of the main topics in a conversation. Because it has really dangerous consequences in young people, but they don´t mind that enormous problems, because  for example they do binge drinking here in Spain. So we need to do something to stop that, because is not normal that enormous problem in the society. 

DRAFTING MY FIRST PARAGRAPH

1.Topic	Young people drugs and alcohol addiction is nowadays one of the main topics in a conversation.
2.Reason	Drugs and alcohol have really dangerous consequences in young people, but they don´t mind that enormous problem.
3.Example	e.g. binge drinking in Spain.
4.Argument	The problems that have drugs and alcohol addiction in young people.
5.Conclusion	We need to do something to stop that because is not normal that enormous problem in the society.

ORGANISING PARAGRAPH

3.1 A.  

topic	Despite this, many countries encourage the growth of homeownership.
example	Ireland and Spain, for example, allow mortgage payers tooffset payments against income tax.
reason	It is widely believed that owning your own home has social as well as economic benefits.
Supporting point1	Compared to renters, homeowners are thought to be morestable members of the community who contribute more tolocal affairs.
Supporting point 2	In addition, neighbourhoods of owner occupiers areconsidered to have less crime and better schools.
Supporting point 3	But above all, ownership encourages saving and allowsfamilies to build wealth.

B 

c. In addition, neighbourhoods of owner occupiers are considered to have less crime and better schools. 

4.1 a  

Topic sentence	All these claims were challenged by the economic crash of 2008, which was in large part caused by defaults on American sub-prime mortgages
Definition	These had been developed to allow higher-risk poorer families to buy their own homes, but contributed to a property price bubble.
Result 1	Even households that had positive equity still felt poorer and reduced their spending.
Result 2	Others were trapped in their houses by negative equity, in other words their houses were worth less than they had paid for them.
Result 3	When this burst, millions of people lost their homes, which for many had contained their savings.
Conclusion	Many economists now argue that there is a maximum level of home ownership that should not be exceeded.

b, c.  

 6 a. 

Topic	It is claimed that increases in rate of home ownership lead to unemployment
Reason	Home ownership appears to make people more reluctant to move to find work
Example	e.g. Spain (high ownership + high unemployment) vs. Switzerland (low ownership + low unemployment).
Argument	Theory still controversial.
Conclusion	Other factors have been proposed, e.g. liquidity of housing markets (how easy to sell houses).

2.1 

1.More connectors

2.No colloquial expressions

3.Question in tittle not adrresed

4.Sentences are too short

5.No reference are given

6.Too much space  given to basic points